Okay Redd, this is coming along great. I love the personality of all the characters. The droid is rather different, isn't he? I like the descriptions of the jungle, but maybe more detail, I don't know. I like how we're left hanging with the group they passed along the way, knowing we'll have to either meet them on the way back, or join them in the fight at the ship. It's a great little mystery as to who is chasing them. Excellent all around, because I know you'll bring it all back together.
I thought "By the holes and the rust" was an exlamation at first, like "Heavens to mergatroid". Fantastic, especially that ending verbal sparring between the two droids.
Okay Redd, this is coming along great. I love the personality of all the characters. The droid is rather different, isn't he? I like the descriptions of the jungle, but maybe more detail, I don't know. I like how we're left hanging with the group they passed along the way, knowing we'll have to either meet them on the way back, or join them in the fight at the ship. It's a great little mystery as to who is chasing them. Excellent all around, because I know you'll bring it all back together.
Thank you so much! Yes that little group might be quite the thorn later on, haha.
More detail, good to know what needs adding to make it better.
I thought "By the holes and the rust" was an exlamation at first, like "Heavens to mergatroid". Fantastic, especially that ending verbal sparring between the two droids.
I mean it could be, in a different story, it's quite a good one too x)
Thank you! Always happy to hear you enjoyed the read.
No. Wait! What? I hate serial stories !!!!!! And, I’m sucked into this one big time.