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maryh10000's avatar

What I loved is that the fight matched the wounds. Great job.

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Redd Oscar's avatar

Thank you, glad you liked it! 😁

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Læwis's avatar

All over a woman.

Always is, always has been, nothing more need truly be said.

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Joseph L. Wiess's avatar

Excellent work.

Ozti almost made it.

Were it not for six men against him,

He would have made it.

All over a woman.

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Redd Oscar's avatar

Pleased to hear you liked it. Thanks for the poem, brilliant :)

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Ben Woestenburg's avatar

I liked this. I liked the tension, his determination. A real winner.

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Redd Oscar's avatar

Thank you, glad you liked it! Otzi wasn't going down without a fight.

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Prince of Permsia's avatar

Were there other dead bodies found with Otzi? If so, how did they get the others off the mountain, and why did they leave him there? You wrote a good short story in terms of plot, but your prose could use some work. Beyond that, if you wanted to write a longer piece, you might want to world build a little bit, look up what we know of Otzi's society and add your own interpretations. In particular, I was curious about your use of his modern name, which was in all likelihood was not the one he was called in life.

Sorry if I seem overly critical, but I think honest feedback is important to a writer.

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