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Honeygloom's avatar

This was really enjoyable! Your descriptions are so vivid and the whole tone is just ominous and creepy. I can see it illustrated, too, this bizarre new sun and all the people wandering after it. Very cool.

Redd Oscar's avatar

Thank you so much! An illustrated version would be cool, might have to try my hand at that...

Michael S. Atkinson's avatar

This... was positively Lovecraftian. *shudders*. Ye gods.

Redd Oscar's avatar

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it.

William F. Edwards's avatar

I like the formatting with this, the whole thing is spooky. Laurence is mysterious to me because I can't tell if he used to be normal or if his mere presence is a sign of madness.

Redd Oscar's avatar

Thanks! I am glad wrangling with poetry blocks and the LaTeX editor paid off.

Laurence was a mystery to me too, he took on a life of his own when writing which I'm quite pleased with. Of all the One Shots thus far this is the one I'd like to delve deeper into.

Lisa Kuznak's avatar

I really enjoyed this, very old-school cosmic horror. I like how you laid the prose out, the visual emphasis of line and weight separate from the rest of the text. Very cool.

Redd Oscar's avatar

Thanks so much! I'm thrilled it paid off.