I liked it. There were a few little mistakes you missed. One was in the 2nd part just after the alarm sounds. But I liked the way it read. There was tension, and great back history, as well as interaction between the characters. You left the droid as a big mystery, and that's great. Your brief visit to the underside of the city was enlightening. And that's quite the cliffhanger you left us with. Excellent all around. The language was crisp, the descriptions of the ship convey the feeling that it's old and more industrial--like a freighter. You leave us with a lot of questions. Who's following them and why, is a great ask?
I liked it. There were a few little mistakes you missed. One was in the 2nd part just after the alarm sounds. But I liked the way it read. There was tension, and great back history, as well as interaction between the characters. You left the droid as a big mystery, and that's great. Your brief visit to the underside of the city was enlightening. And that's quite the cliffhanger you left us with. Excellent all around. The language was crisp, the descriptions of the ship convey the feeling that it's old and more industrial--like a freighter. You leave us with a lot of questions. Who's following them and why, is a great ask?