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Morag's avatar

Great start, looking forward to finding out more. And I love the picture at the start too :)

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Redd Oscar's avatar

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed reading.

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Joseph L. Wiess's avatar

What a way to start a story. It could go in many different ways, from vengeance to survival to a hero's arc. I can't wait to see what comes next.

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Redd Oscar's avatar

Thanks! Glad to hear you enjoyed this opening. Next week we will meet Prince Lothan.

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Justin Harrisson's avatar

Fantastic! I love it as the adventure picks up and everything is moving the way it is it really gets me wondering things. Looking forward to read more as they embark to Silicia.

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Redd Oscar's avatar

Thank you, glad to hear you enjoyed chapter 1! I hope you enjoy the rest.

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James Copley's avatar

That was incredible! Very impressive opening, going from zero to sixty in only a few paragraphs. No info dumps, yet we can still see a perfect picture, not only of the main character, but also his family, his village and even his culture.

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Redd Oscar's avatar

Always good to hear the parts I aimed to do well with did their job, thank you.

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Ben Woestenburg's avatar

Oh, I like this! So much potential. I can't wait to get into it.

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Redd Oscar's avatar

Thank you! Means a lot to hear that. Hope the story lives up to the potential.

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Dan Blakely's avatar

Solid start - let's see where Tobin takes us.

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Redd Oscar's avatar

Thank you!

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Redd Oscar's avatar

That poem is beautiful.

Thank you!

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